雅思写作错误与分析经典总结(二)

六。指代不清(ambiguous reference of pronouns)

  指代不清主要讲的是代词与被指代的人或物关系不清,或者先后所用的代词不一致。试看下面这一句:

  mary was friendly to my sister because she wanted her to be her bridesmaid.

  (玛丽和我姐姐很要好,因为她要她做她的伴娘。)

  读完上面这一句话,读者无法明确地判断两位姑娘中谁将结婚,谁将当伴娘。如果我们把易于引起误解的代词的所指对象加以明确,意思就一目了然了。这个句子可改为:

  mary was friendly to my sister because she wanted my sister to be her bridesmaid.

  例1. and we can also know the society by serving it yourself.

  剖析:句中人称代词we 和反身代词yourself指代不一致。改为:we can also know society by serving it ourselves.

 

  七。不间断句子(run-on sentences)

  什么叫run-on sentence?请看下面的例句。

  例1。there are many ways we get to know the outside world.

  剖析:这个句子包含了两层完整的意思:“there are many ways.”以及“we get to know the outside world.”。简单地把它们连在一起就不妥当了。

  改为:there are many ways for us to learn about the outside world. 或:there are many ways through which we can become acquainted with the outside world

 

  八。措词毛病(troubles in diction)

  diction 是指在特定的句子中怎样适当地选用词语的问题,囿于教学时间紧迫,教师平时在这方面花的时间往往极其有限,影响了学生在写作中没有养成良好的推敲,斟酌的习惯。他们往往随心所欲,拿来就用。所以作文中用词不当的错误比比皆是。

  例1。the increasing use of chemical obstacles in agriculture also makes pollution.

  (农业方面化学物质使用的不断增加也造成了污染。)

  剖析:显然,考生把obstacles“障碍”,“障碍物”误作substance“物质”了。另外“the increasing use (不断增加的使用)”应改为“abusive use (滥用)”。

  改为:the abusive use of chemical substances in agriculture also causes/leads to pollution.

 

  九。累赘(redundancy)

  言以简洁为贵。写句子没有一个多余的词;写段落没有一个无必要的句子。能用单词的不用词组;能用词组的不用从句或句子。如:in spite of the fact that he is lazy, i like him.

  本句的“the fact that he is lazy”系同谓语从句,我们按照上述“能用词组的不用从句”可以改为:in spite of his laziness, i like him.

  例1。for the people who are diligent and kind, money is just the thing to be used to buy the thing they need.

  剖析:整个句子可以大大简化。

  改为:diligent, caring people use money only to buy what they need.

 

  十。不连贯(incoherence)

  不连贯是指一个句子前言不对后语,或是结构上不畅通。这也是考生常犯的毛病。

  例1。the fresh water, it is the most important things of the earth.

  剖析:the fresh water 与逗号后的it 不连贯。it 与things 在数方面不一致。

  改为:fresh water is the most important thing in the world.

 

  十一。综合性语言错误(comprehensive misusage)

  所谓“综合性语言错误”,是指除了上述十种错误以外,还有诸如时态,语态,标点符号,大小写等方面的错误。

  例1.today, money to everybody is very importance, our’s eat, cloth, live, go etc.

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